smarilyn 发表于 2013-2-3 23:49   全显示 1楼
学校这个场景是很多淫虫意淫的首选,女教师也应该是幻想比例高的一个群体，这类题材佳作虽然不少，但仍是大可作为的
全篇几乎以全对白形式完成，作为色文这就很难把握了，情感描写难以深入，肉戏也难于细腻，心理活动完全要透过对白来表达的话难度是不小的。
整体感觉是情节过于平白，缺乏细节,故事内容也有待进一步充实
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